CeCe Lyra

We have a strong title.

The word count is on the shorter side.

But at the same time, people have declining attention spans.

And I quite like a Pacey novel.

So I'm OK with that.

Yeah, I understand why she would submit this to me.

It's really great.

I also really like the first plot paragraph because it establishes the protagonist's place in the world.

Like I know what Blanca Moore is up against.

It's very important in a query letter to establish your protagonist's place in the world at the beginning of the story, not the place in the planet Earth's world, their world, right?

So I understand like her grievances, her socio-emotional framework based on that paragraph alone.

So great job.

Then we get to like the change and storytelling is about change, right?

We get to like what plot happens.

And I understand the inciting incident very well.

She gets gifted this mysterious skincare product and the product transforms her.

What I'm not clear on and I really want to be is what this transformation entails.

A mouth to grow on her stomach.

Does this mean like there's a mouth where her belly button is supposed to be like a mouth that is visible?

Or does this mean like a mouth inside the stomach?