CeCe Lyra

So, you know, no, in that sense.

But yes, in the sense of what she's trying to do.

Because I believe that the storyteller thinks this is interesting, right?

So I think I'm addressing her intent and her effort.

She... And again, I know that if you're writing a story where the whole plot hinges on a woman being unhappy in her life, being...

sucked in by the internet world of social media and attention and views and likes and wanting to be an influencer because that's her only chance of a better life and then she goes really far to get that i understand that it might be tempting to be like i'm gonna start with the paragraph about how her life needs to improve but it's too on the nose for my taste there are people who like this a little bit more on the nose fiction it is not for me like the

As soon as I read the first two paragraphs, I was like, okay, the writing isn't for me.

It's one of the reasons why all we really need to see is a few pages to know whether we might be or might not be a good fit for a client.

It's all the writing, right?

So I did think that there were some really clever things.

Like for example, instead of having her think about what she looks like, you know, the color of her hair, her eyes, she is looking at herself through the video that she just filmed, but she uses filters.

And she talks about how the filters make her look so much better, that instead of her mousy hair, her hair looks XYZ.

And that is a very clever way to not only weave in the story's themes in a way that's more subtle, but also to give the description of the protagonist.

So

I actually think the, the, the author here has a lot of potential.

I don't think it's a type of story that's for me.

Like, again, it's just like just the kind of writing that it is.

It isn't a CC, but that's like a personal thing.

And I think that it's not starting in the right place.

So I would encourage you to find a more interesting scene.