Ronnie Karam

The world saw elegance.

I'm like, hmm.

The world saw grace.

What the world did not see was the war.

It began like so many battles did.

undercooked pasta at an extremely overpriced restaurant with something whispered it began like so many wars with someone offering a machine-made cappuccino

someone said something maybe it was someone maybe it was everyone but something was said it's like i don't know i'm gonna need some more work on this play i don't know where y'all found this stella but it was a little on the nose okay can we make it more like could we get andrew lloyd weber in here i mean i want to see them like crawling around singing like songs and stuff

concerned about this Act 1 break.

It just feels a little unsteady.

Like, I don't know.

We need to really just, like, the stakes are just not high enough for me.

It needs to be more grounded.

I need more in the first 20 pages.

We need some character development.

The inciting incident is just really not strong enough, okay?

We need to be really clear about what started this war, okay?

From the top.

But gossip in this family grows like mold.

Lisa, one of the eldest.

And then it cuts to Whitney.